Thank you for your feedback. It means a lot to me especially since you're the biggest fan of PE that I roped into the the series. You know it best, and so you thinking it's good means a lot.

I agree, that line needs work.

I'll post the final draft when I get it done, but it shouldn't be much different.

Yep, bit easier writing on something I enjoy so. But there's a question I keep asking myself... As much as I would normally say I bullshitted my way through it, turned what should not have been able to be a topic into a topic. I wonder, am I actually a good writer and see this in it, or am I just well-practiced at bullshitting what sounds good?